✨ Jackie Khalilieh shares her inspiring journey to publication ✨
Plus, another tip-packed 📕Books with Hooks🪝, and a modern retelling of one of the best selling novels of all of time gets its "Yes!" in The Query Lab
Happy Friday friends!
It’s been another inspiring week here at The Shit No One Tells You About Writing. First up on the podcast, Bianca, Carly and CeCe discuss two upmarket queries (including one in a genre we don’t see a lot of!), followed by Bianca’s interview with young adult author Jackie Khalilieh (which we’re particularly excited about because we know a lot of you out there are writing YA, and giving the people what they want is one of our favourite things 😉).
And even if you don’t write YA, there’s lots of comfort and inspiration to found in this one, particularly when Jackie explains how, after her first manuscript (“the book of [her] heart” ❤️) didn’t land, she kept going until she eventually got her agent with her third. We know the querying process is grueling, and hope this is a good reminder that you will come out the other side one day, as long as you keep trying. (Editor’s Note: I think a lot of first manuscripts are books of the heart, the story that’s been building inside us for years or even a lifetime, and there’s even more reason to be encouraged by Jackie’s story—but you’ll have to tune in to find out what I mean!)
Also this week, we’ve got another round of The Query Lab, this time with a letter that’s a great example of how clearly articulated stakes and the right comps can help you get that “Yes!” (and all in under 400 words👏👏👏 ).
Thanks for reading!
The Shit No One Tells You About Writing Team
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This Week’s Podcast✨🎙️✨
This week on the podcast (listen to it here!), Bianca, Carly, and CeCe critique two upmarket submissions, one of which is in the gothic genre, during📕Books with Hooks🪝. They discuss:
The reasoning behind placing your metadata at the top of a query
Avoiding unnecessary detail in your query
Avoiding slipping from pitch to synopsis
The need for interiority, particularly interiority that will surprise the reader
Taking the opportunity to use plot points as curiosity seeds whenever possible
Avoiding performative dialogue
Being mindful about word choice in your query so as not to confuse your reader
Avoiding withholding too much plot in your query; and
Falling into the 'previously on' trap.
“Start your query letter with a paragraph that includes all the metadata. Title, genre, word count, comps, and of course the hook. Why do we ask for comps up top? Why do we ask for that information right out of the gate? It's really because it sets the stage for the plot paragraph. It's something we talk about a lot on the podcast and, in my opinion, makes a huge difference in setting a query letter apart.”
— CeCe
After which, Bianca interviews YA author, Jackie Khalilieh. They discuss:
Jackie's journey to publication for her debut novel, Something More
The inspiration behind the novel
Her revision process
The necessity of tying wants to stakes
Writing a main character that is neurodivergent and how that may diverge from reader expectations of genre
Jackie's experience with beta readers and being true to her own experience and intentions for her novel; and
Jackie's advice to YA writers on how to accurately portray the emotionality of younger people.
“My agent once said to me, “You write the things that people think but would never say out loud.” And I took it as a compliment … I want to be honest about the feelings because most of the time they're universal. And why not put it out there?”
— Jackie
More information about Jackie can be found here. She's also on Instagram.
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The Query lab 📝🖊
Welcome to The Query Lab where each Friday for the next few months we’ll be
sharing a successful query letter that got an author their agent AND their book deal.
Today we’ve got a query from Hailey Alcatraz, author of Up In Flames 🔥:
Dear [AGENT NAME],
I am seeking representation for UP IN FLAMES, a 100,000 word coming of age story that explores the issues of privilege, hard work, and love through the eyes of a second-generation immigrant and mixed race Mexican American heroine. I believe this story is an excellent match for your passion for [INSERT DETAILS FROM MANUSCRIPT WISH LIST THAT I CONNECTED WITH].
Strong and stubborn Ruby Ortega comes of age as her world burns to the ground. Set in modern-day southern California in an affluent community wrecked by wildfires and tensions over immigration, Ruby is not only propelled into a battle to save her family’s livelihood and legacy, but for the first time in her life she comes face-to-face with the reality of racial discrimination—something her fair complexion and comfortable lifestyle had previously sheltered her from.
She will stop at nothing to preserve the Ortega name—even if that means toiling in the ashen wasteland herself, rallying with the ostracized immigrants whose hardships are exacerbated by the natural disaster, or even befriending unlikely characters she despises, including the hopelessly optimistic girlfriend of the man Ruby loves or her father’s young, intriguing and altogether aggravating business associate who mysteriously appears in her life to simultaneously lend a helping hand and stir up trouble. Despite all her efforts, Ruby isn’t sure she’ll recognize her world—or herself—after the smoke clears.
For fans of smart and diverse contemporary retellings in the vein of Anna K by Jenny Lee and Ana of California by Andi Teran, UP IN FLAMES takes the iconic, flawed, and undeniably problematic Scarlett O’Hara and gives her modern context: Hispanic roots and the opportunity to use her resilience to be a force for positive change in her community. As a Mexican-American woman, an English teacher for mostly Hispanic students in South Phoenix, and a lover of powerful female protagonists, I am uniquely qualified to tell this story of a mixed race young woman blazing her own trail.
UP IN FLAMES is my first novel and I hope you will have interest in reading it; I’ve attached a document containing my query, synopsis and first three chapters. May I send you the completed manuscript?
Thank you in advance for your time. I look forward to hearing from you.
Hailey Alcaraz
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Click below for the downloadable version of Hailey’s successful query!
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In all honesty, I found this query letter long-winded and unhelpful. And incomplete. ALL agents request three things: A synopsis, a bio, and a sample. The first paragraph includes a brief but usable synopsis. So where is the bio and sample? Or did I miss something?
The rest of the query wore me out. What difference does a wonderful story make if you can't write? IF agents are actually reading unsolicited queries (a big if, IMHO), but IF agents are actually reading unsolicited queries, why would they want to read all about your book, paragraph after glowing paragraph, becoming intrigued, imagining a market, formulating a mental response, only to find you can't write? How many writers can't write? 99.9 %. And let's face it friends, and again honesty, that's being generous.
In query letters you want to get the text in front of the agent as fast as possible. That means speeding up the first part, the synopsis and bio. The first part means nothing. The last part means everything.